MakeIt Memorable #2

 

 

In the first story, the one I read I believe that the relevance of living in Minnesota kept the remote, or mouse in this case at bay. Also I had to read it for the class. But because of its proximity it keeps peoples attention. Also when the author wrote like this it sounded like he was writing in threes : "The puck was three inches wide. The hole in the plywood was three-and-a-half inches wide. The kid and the stick were 89 feet of ice away." by writing in threes it makes the reader interested and especially want to read the story in this context. Last but not least it surprises the reader. Sure it might spell it out for you in the beginning but after you read the circumstances the boy went through to gain al that money one wouldn't think of giving it back. But the boys end up doing it because their parents felt guilty.

 

 

 

In the second story, the one I viewed, I heard the active voice of the author when he used the verb feeling and chilling instead of was and cold. he used powerful driving word rather than passive boring words. he didn't use any gobbltygook football lingo. He could have catered the story to football fans by paying more attention to the boys records or playing ability. but he payed more attention to the family aspect. The Author was very conversational during the one on one interview with the parents he kept footage of himself joking around with them and making them laugh. Everybody likes to see people laugh, that could have grabbed other peoples attention.